DZ-62: Unfilmables and Unscriptables 3 - As Ifs & Emotional context
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12/02/19 • 137 min
How do you know if your unfilmable is good... or if you’re just being a wanker?
In this third and final part of our series on unfilmables, Chas and Stu turn their critical eye to... each other’s work! They take their key learnings from the previous episodes and apply them to rewriting scenes from their own projects. They discuss metaphors, emotional context, and how you can write tone on the page withoutresorting to unfilmables.
They are also joined by Carissa Lee (who has been reading the excerpts) to discuss her perspective as an actor on the scripts we’ve been reading; and they answer listener questions about unfilmables.
And, lastly, in backmatter Carissa reads the entire script to Stu’s award-nominated script, DUST BUNNY.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode, and Carissa Lee for performing the big print.
RUNNING ORDER- Introduction / Discussion
- UNCONDITIONAL (Pilot) by Chas Fisher (@ 09:10)
- PAYLOAD by Matthew Clayfield & Stuart Willis (@ 38:48)
- DUST BUNNY by Stuart Willis (@ 59:50)
- THE ACTOR’S PERSPECTIVE with Carissa Lee (@ 01:15:59)
- LISTENER QUESTIONS & KEY LEARNINGS (@ 01:41:56)
- Backmatter: DUST BUNNY - full script read by Carissa Lee (@ 01:59:13)
- LISTEN: DZ-60: Unfilmables and Unscriptables (Part 1) – Engaging imagination
- LISTEN:DZ-61: Unfilmables and Unscriptables (Part 2) - Moments of Awe
- READ: DZ-62 Unfilmables (Part 3) - Collated Scripts
- WATCH: PAYLOADwritten & directed by Stuart Willis
- WATCH: RESTORATIONwritten by Matthew Clayfield & Stuart Willis
- LISTEN: PAYLOAD Original Soundtrackcomposed by David Barber
- LISTEN: RESTORATION Original Soundtrackcomposed by David Barber
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Many thanks to all our patrons but particularly to Theis, Jesse, Daniel, Jack, Chris, Khrob, Sandra, Nick, Matteo, and Carrie. They’re good humans.
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How do you know if your unfilmable is good... or if you’re just being a wanker?
In this third and final part of our series on unfilmables, Chas and Stu turn their critical eye to... each other’s work! They take their key learnings from the previous episodes and apply them to rewriting scenes from their own projects. They discuss metaphors, emotional context, and how you can write tone on the page withoutresorting to unfilmables.
They are also joined by Carissa Lee (who has been reading the excerpts) to discuss her perspective as an actor on the scripts we’ve been reading; and they answer listener questions about unfilmables.
And, lastly, in backmatter Carissa reads the entire script to Stu’s award-nominated script, DUST BUNNY.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode, and Carissa Lee for performing the big print.
RUNNING ORDER- Introduction / Discussion
- UNCONDITIONAL (Pilot) by Chas Fisher (@ 09:10)
- PAYLOAD by Matthew Clayfield & Stuart Willis (@ 38:48)
- DUST BUNNY by Stuart Willis (@ 59:50)
- THE ACTOR’S PERSPECTIVE with Carissa Lee (@ 01:15:59)
- LISTENER QUESTIONS & KEY LEARNINGS (@ 01:41:56)
- Backmatter: DUST BUNNY - full script read by Carissa Lee (@ 01:59:13)
- LISTEN: DZ-60: Unfilmables and Unscriptables (Part 1) – Engaging imagination
- LISTEN:DZ-61: Unfilmables and Unscriptables (Part 2) - Moments of Awe
- READ: DZ-62 Unfilmables (Part 3) - Collated Scripts
- WATCH: PAYLOADwritten & directed by Stuart Willis
- WATCH: RESTORATIONwritten by Matthew Clayfield & Stuart Willis
- LISTEN: PAYLOAD Original Soundtrackcomposed by David Barber
- LISTEN: RESTORATION Original Soundtrackcomposed by David Barber
Please considering rating or subscribing to us on Apple Podcasts! or sharing us on the Social Medias! We like finding new listeners. We are @stuwillis and @chasffisher on twitter. And you can find @draft_zero on Instagram and Twitter.
Many thanks to all our patrons but particularly to Theis, Jesse, Daniel, Jack, Chris, Khrob, Sandra, Nick, Matteo, and Carrie. They’re good humans.
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Previous Episode
DZ-61: Unfilmables and Unscriptables 2 - Moments of Awe
How can unfilmables help you create those cinematic moments of awe?
In this second part of our series on unfilmables, Chas and Stu continue their deep dive into how writing the “unfilmable” can enhance your script. Rather than looking at micro moments, they turn their gaze to "moments of awe" — those often breathtaking cinematic moments that feel beyond writing. But are those scenes actually unscriptable?
In this episode we look at sequences from YOU WERE NEVER REALLY HERE, SEARCHING FOR BOBBY FISCHER, THE INVITATION, and MOONLIGHT. We talk writing cinematically, performance beats, breaking (and maintaining) “the spell”, limited palettes of language, self-contextualising writing, and "instructables".
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode, and Carissa Lee for performing the big print.
As always: SPOILERS ABOUND and all copyright material used under fair use for educational purposes.
RUNNING ORDER- WHEN UNFILMABLES DON’T WORK(@ 12:01)
- YOU WERE NEVER REALLY HERE(@ 26:08) screenplay by Lynne Ramsay, based on the novella by Jonathan Ames
- READ: https://www.scriptslug.com/script/you-were-never-really-here-2017
- JustWatch:https://www.justwatch.com/au/movie/you-were-never-really-here
- SEARCHING FOR BOBBY FISCHER(@ 38:29) screenplay by Steven Zallian, based on the book by Fred Waitzkin
- THE INVITATION(@ 01:04:14) by Phil Hay & Matt Manfredi
- MOONLIGHT(@ 01:29:29) Written by Barry Jenkins, Based on “In the Moonlight Black Boys Look Blue” by Tarell Alvin McCraney
- WATCH: Moonlight 2016 Ending
- READ: https://www.dailyscript.com/scripts/MOONLIGHT.pdf
- JustWatch: https://www.justwatch.com/au/movie/moonlight
- WRAP UP AND KEY LEARNINGS(@ 01:49:43)
EPISODE LINKS
- LISTEN: DZ-16: Masters of Time and Whitespace
- LISTEN: DZ-60: Unfilmables and Unscriptables (Part 1) – Engaging imagination
- READ: DZ-61 Unfilmables Part 2 - Collated Scripts
Please considering rating or subscribing to us on Apple Podcasts! or sharing us on the Social Medias! We like finding new listeners. We are @stuwillis and @chasffisher on twitter. And you can find @draft_zero on Instagram and Twitter.
Many thanks to all our patrons but particularly to Jesse, Daniel, Devin, Jack, Paul, Chris, Khrob, Sandra, Nick, Rob, Matteo, Daniel and Carrie. They’re good humans.
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Next Episode
DZ-63: Tools for Better Dialogue 2 - Hook and Eye
How can you create flow and contrast in your dialogue?
A full three years after the first instalment (and one of our most popular), Stu and Chas have kidnapped Stephen Cleary to once again develop some craft tools around dialogue. It would be fair to say that - in that time - all three have learnt a lot more about dialogue than they knew in 2016. It would be also fair to say that Stephen perhaps learnt a little more through his research into “genderlect”.
In Part II, we analyse key scenes from films and TV shows famous for their dialogue, namely FLEABAG (Season 2, Episode 5), JUNO and DEADWOOD (The Pilot). The biggest tools we explore are: the hook and eye; how dialogue can reveal status and empathy; rhythm; contrast and affinity; and pacing.
And just to help us all out, Stephen rounds out the episode with some quick fire examples - FIVE EASY PIECES, JERRY MAGUIRE, GROSSE POINTE BLANK, and NOTTING HILL (again) - and further dialogue tips.
Thanks to Chris Walker for editing this episode during the holiday season.
RUNNING ORDER
- Intro/Groundwork
- Status and Gender (@ 05:52)
- FLEABAG (Season 2, Episode 5) by Phoebe Waller-Bridge (@ 15:26)
- WATCH: Hair Is Everything — https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q97iIDx-b7U
- JustWatch: https://www.justwatch.com/us/tv-show/fleabag
- JUNO by Diablo Cody (@ 47:41)
- WATCH: Juno Tells Her Parents: — https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tWC-R-q85JU
- JustWatch: https://www.justwatch.com/us/movie/juno
- DEADWOOD (Pilot) (@ 01:20:20)
- WATCH: Seth Bullock Hangs a Man in Montana https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TtgjwmYgTOg
- JustWatch: https://www.justwatch.com/us/tv-show/deadwood
- More Dialogue Tips and Techniques (@ 01:40:55)
- WATCH: Jerry Maguire “Show me the money” - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZTFJocQBLyE
- WATCH: Grosse Pointe Blanke “You can never go home again” - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WgLr6qlpec4
- WATCH: Notting Hill “Kitchen Scene” - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xtQShHQuPwI&t=93s
- LISTEN: DZ-31: Tools for Better Dialogue (Part 1)
- WATCH: Five Easy Pieces “Side Order of Toast” - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=38maVb_30ng
- FOLLOW: Stephen Cleary
- JOIN: Stephen Cleary Workshops
- READ: Genderlect / Language and Gender
- READ: The Truth About How Much Women Talk — and Whether Men Listen
Please considering rating or subscribing to us on Apple Podcasts! or sharing us on the Social Medias! We like finding new listeners. We are @stuwillis and @chasffisher on twitter. And you can find @draft_zero on Instagram and Twitter.
Many thanks to all our patrons but particularly to Theis, Jesse, Daniel, Jack, Chris, Khrob, Sandra, Nick, Matteo, and Carrie. They’re good humans.
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